Review on draft and final script

Review on our first draft script and how we have changed it to create our final script...


The reason why we changed the first version of our script is that we didnt feel it had much tension in it, we were trying to grasp the idea of a chase like many other action thrillers we had looked into, however our first script seemed brief and their was not much twists in the plot that would leave the audience anticipating or wanting to know what would happen next. Scene five which we added on in our final version brings the whole opening sequence together, it is when the two charecters meet; we have written how we will create the same reaction from both charecters but both for a different reason, one is in utter pain the other in joy over what they have done. We hope this will leave the audience puzzled and wanting to watch on. We then want to cut straight to the opening credits which are fast upbeat accompanied by a score.

We also changed our scene three, we did not think our flash back idea was as good as it could have been; we added a third charecter, who the protagonist pushes over in a series of extremely short flash back clips. These flash backs are all part of the mystery we are trying to portray, the flash backs are all so irrelevent however aim to come together at the end of the opening sequence to confuse the viewer. They will never know who is hurt and who is the killer until after the opening sequence, this is our whole idea of a thriller and was our best way of creating it in a short time period we have before the film begins. The changes we have made we hope make our storyline more like a contemporary thriller and we have gone on to show how we wish the script would be put into actions in our storyboard.